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Name: Alice McKinley Age: 17 Instrument you play or would like to play: piano, keyboards, mallet instruments Three special things about you: insanely complex imagination, prefers rain over sunshine, h

The upper room was cleared of all presence except for the heavy, perfume-filled air and the lonely child sitting on the bed. A great cold had engulfed her little heart, ...

Cute. Work on your outline because it's uneven. I know with pencil art you can't get every line to look smooth but it can be closer. The beak could be ...

Oh my word, where was this? These are beautiful. I have to admit that the first one was the best in my opinion. If only there wasn't that blasted building ...

Scott Max jumped down from a rock, landing pretty hard for a small kid. I let the kids lead the way through the jungle to look for a spring. I ...

Scott-- Three? I looked my charges up and down trying to grasp that there were three of them. I didn't even know that was possible. Is this some new concept ...

Corrections will mostly be in bold First off, I liked it. I think you have a great plot even though it reminded me somewhat of Mulan. At the beginning you ...

Did I come in too late to be a director? If I did, I'm sorry.

I liked this poem. It was pretty good. Here's some of my thoughts: You had a decent rhyme scheme going until the last stanza where you just randomly broke off ...

Hi everybody. I haven't seen a good storybook like this in years, so I hope we can keep it going till the end. Here's my character: Name: Scott Fermhan Age: ...

Someone go ahead and have Suzie killed or leave or whatever. I'm out.

Suzie- "Where were all your friends going with the guns?" I froze and Bree tensed up. "Nowhere Mom," she replied smoothly. "Bree-" "Oh look, Bree brought Sushi," I interupted and ...

Suzie- I wasn't sure what to do... laugh or get upset at Alis for ruining the only skirt I had. I decided to inwardly fume, outwardly giggle. Reg too gave ...

"JAMES!" Maitea and I got Riley's gun and met up with Ace outside of the room. I had to tie my shoe so they went in without me. That was ...

Suzie- I was wandering, not wanting to be too much of a bother while Bree was in recovery. Maitea found me. "Riley need something?" "Yeah. She wants to know where ...